Cogheart Blogpost Roundup

Cogheart Blogpost Roundup

Finally for December, I thought I would share some of the blogposts and Q and As I have written since Cogheart was published in one big group post. Here they are…

It was fun to answer everyone’s various questions about the book, and even occasionally get to write about a few different things, like my favourite animals in children’s fiction…

 

Bringing Animals to Life in Children’s Fiction for The Writers and Artists Blog….

Talking about the genesis of Cogheart with Stephanie over on her blog Typewritered…

 I also spoke with Pippa Wilson  at the HelloPipski Blog about the inside story behind Cogheart.

Who posted a lovely review of the book…

 

For the YaShot Blog Tour 2016 I spoke to George Lester over on his blog.

I also did a super-long interview with the website Airship Ambassador, which I think answers any question anyone could possibly conceive of about the book, here…

Over on Christina Banach‘s blog I took part in her spotlight author interviews…

And on Words and Pictures the SCBWI Blog I answered questions in Nicky Schmidt’s Scbwi Debut Authors series, talking about my journey to publication.

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9 tips on rewriting your first draft.

Peter

 

Many Many drafts of Cogheart, and the proof, and a lovely fox from Kathy Evans.
Many Many drafts of Cogheart, and the proof, and a lovely fox from Kathy Evans.

 

A month ago I wrote a post called 7 tips to help you write your first draft. Since then I have been working on a second draft of Cogheart Book 2. A draft that I hoped would be good enough to send to my editor and agent for editorial comments. And so I thought I would write something about how that process of revising my first draft went.

If you finished your first draft since the last post – good work! Eat some cake, drink some wine, guzzle some chocs, dance, or do whatever your celebratory thing is. But I would suggest not showing your pages to anyone just yet. Not until you’ve had time to read through, revise what you’ve written, and get it to a second draft that you feel happy with. So here, because I couldn’t quite squeeze them into seven, are nine tips to help you get to that point…

1. Print out your first draft and read it through.

You might find a few story gaps. Don’t worry about those at this stage. You will end up rewriting again… and again… and again… until you’ve fixed them. Yay!

For now, just keep reading.

People often call the first draft ‘the Random draft’, ‘the Zero Draft’, or ‘the Vomit Draft’. That’s because as you read you’ll find LOADS wrong with it. There are plots that don’t conclude, characters who seem flat, and random scenes that don’t quite make sense. But don’t despair,  because you can save your story. And you will. There will even be ACE bits that you love and are worth keeping.

2. Write a note for each mistake.

Scribble things all over the manuscript with a pencil, even if you think the scene you’re editing won’t make it into the next draft.

I find it helpful to add potential corrections for all the problems, big or small. Writing notes is as much about thinking aloud, and turning things over in your mind, as it is about fixing them. Remember to leave big ticks and contunuity notes for scenes that are great but just need moving.

3. Uh-oh, big problems!

If you’re anything like me here are a few of the big problems you might find as you read through your first draft:

  • The protagonist has no single, strong, overarching external goal.
  • Or even an internal goal.
  • The protagonist takes no action, solves no problems and barely emotes.
  • There are too few clues or mystery elements.
  • The villain isn’t villainous enough.
  • A character in Chapter One mouths off about the whole plot, revealing all kinds of secrets better discovered by the readers and protagonist in tiny, hard-earned, incremental pieces.

These are head-scratchers, but keep reading and if you come up with answers scribble them in a notebook or on paper. If you can’t find a solution frame the problem as a question to start your brain turning over.

4. Put the Manuscript aside for a few more days. 

So you’ve read through and made SO MANY notes, but there are still problems to solve, or things that don’t quite sit right. Put the manuscipt aside again for a few days to give yourself time to percolate and juggle the characters and scenes around in your head some more.

I find if I try and do this at my desk answers might not appear. So I go out and do something else. Perhaps answers still don’t arrive… You sweat and worry and they still don’t make themselves known… Finally… last thing at night, or first thing in the morning, or in the bath, or on the train, or wherever, a solution to your most pressing story problem flashes into your brain, it’s much better than the previous idea you came up with and you rush to write it down…

5. Write a one line pitch.

Now you’ve written pages and pages of notes, you might start to have a feel of what the story’s actually about. Who the lead really is, and what the backbone of it will become. At this point it might be useful to write a one line pitch.

A one line pitch is 30-60 words about your protagonist and main plot. Something like:

When Jack and Jill set out to fetch a pail water, they find the Big Bad has bought the well and plans to keep it all for himself. Jack and Jill try to steal back the water,  but Jack falls down and breaks his crown. Now Jill must save him and the precious pail, before the Big Bad catches up with them both.

This is too long, but you get the idea. Take your (much better-than-this) one line pitch and stick it above your computer monitor so you can see it when you do your re-write.

6. Write the WANTS and NEEDS of characters.

As the Rolling Stones said: ‘You can’t always get what you want, but you get what you need…’ WANT VS NEED is more to do with the interior of a character. I find it useful to write a little post it of what the character’s wants at the start of the story, and what they need to get to feel fulfilled at the end. These two thing are often completely different. Sometimes you won’t hit them both in the early drafts but they are good to bear in mind.

7. Rewrite your synopsis for structure.

Normally at this point, when I have SO MANY notes, I sit down with pen and paper and rewrite my synopsis/outline/map document. The aim is to fix the macro plot and include all my new stuff.

If you have some good structure books it might be worth having a quick flick through them before you do this. Personally, I try to write more of chapter outline this time. If, in refining a plot point in chapter ten, I suddenly realise I need to set something up in chapter five, I write a post it for that and stick it on the relevant page of the outline to remind myself to add it in later. My new chapter outline comes out about 10-15 pages. But, whatever your map was for the first draft you might rather revise that.

8. Complete re-write, or patch-up job?

One last decision: can you rewrite sections and tweak the first draft manuscript, or is it better to start from scratch and incorporate bits of the original when and where you need them?

9. Sit down and write your second draft.

Whichever route you decide to go, you have your new road map documents – your notes, your characters’ wants and needs, a one liner, a synopsis, and a manuscript covered in scribbles.  You’ve taken this journey once before, maybe on slightly more meandering roads, but this time you’re no longer driving in pitch black darkness and you have much more of an idea where you’re going. So sit down and write your way through this, again…

7 tips to help you write a first draft

Peter

Recently I’ve been working on the first draft of a Cogheart Sequel. I find first drafts the MOST difficult part of writing. (And then the second, and third – a bit like Stanley Yelnats digging his holes). It’s scary when you visualize those empty pages and missing words, not to mention the dark plot holes you might fall into. Then there’s the anxiety of getting it all down, especially if you have a deadline. With all that to think about, it’s no wonder it’s so tough to get through, but here are my seven tips to help you with a first draft…

1. Apply butt to seat of chair and write.

Set yourself an achievable deadline to write the book. Three months, six months, nine months, or a year. Remember: the shorter the timescales the better chance you have of finishing, because if you maintain momentum, you’ll be in a the same mindset nearing the end as you were when you started. Then try to get the words on the page as quickly as possible.

2. Make a Schedule.

Work out how long the book is going to be in words: 20,000 50,000, 60,000, 100,000 – whatever. Then divide that number by the time you have to write – say a couple of hours a day, 5-6 days a week. This gives you an optimum word count per day. Aim for that, but try to find what works for you, and be realistic, if your writing goal turns out to be unachievable you’re going to have to adjust the schedule.

Writing Diary
Writing Diary

I have a writing diary and some stickers to put in it if I hit my daily wordcount. I aim for 1,500 words a day. On a good day it’s possible to do that in two or three hours, but sometimes, if things go badly, I sit there forever and only get a couple of hundred words down.

Don’t beat yourself up if that happens, just start in again the next day. And if you hit a big milestone target add a jazzy sticker and buy yourself a nice treat!

3. Don’t get it right. Get it written.

Give yourself permission to write a bad first draft. It’s like sculpture – first you slap the clay on the board, then you shape it, then finally, you finesse it. But, to begin with, all you have are big messy lumps of clay – vague shape. You need those vague shapes, those broad ideas as your foundations, so try and let the process happen and edit later. Remember there’s always the next draft to fix things. Basically, don’t overthink it. Write whatever comes, and try to get out of the way of the unconscious so you can hear the words.

A map
A map – or is it Caracasonne?

4. Take a map.

E L Doctrow, once said: ‘Writing a novel is like driving a car at night. You can only see as far as your headlights, but you can make the whole trip that way.’ 

It’s an amazing quote, but my advice would be, if you’re going to go driving/novelling at night, know your rough destination and TAKE A MAP! Your map can be anything – a scribbled diagram, a one page synopsis, a treatment of three pages, or fifty. The important thing is with it, you’ve a better chance of getting where you want to go, because even a basic map will show the big landmarks. (Clue: these landmarks are the main story beats of your novel ie. act breaks, mid-point, final destination.)

5. The map is not the territory.

Some German philosopher said this. It means, a map is a schematic thing – a plan only. It doesn’t really show you what somewhere is truly like – experientially. After all, on the ground you might have a different thought – want to go a different way – and, if you do, you must feel free to take that path, see where it leads. Even if it turns out to be a dead end and you have to go back.

Because not everyone likes maps, you could be a Dirk-Gently-type-person, driving along and following every random car (or plot bunny) you pass in the hope of getting where you want to go.

6. Don’t panic and Don’t look back!

Which brings me on to the immortal words of Douglas Adams: ‘Don’t Panic!’ Especially about what’s up ahead – there’s nothing you can do about that. You have to try and be zen and write the sentence you’re writing right now, One word at a time. ‘A word after a word after a word = power.’ (I think that’s Anne Lammot.)

Keep adding words, keep moving forward. And, in the mortal words of Bob Dylan: ‘Don’t look back’. M G Leonard, who wrote the amazing Beetle Boy, likens it to Orpheus in the underworld, if you look back, all might be lost, so you’ve got to keep on going.

Monster stickers
Congratulatory monster

7. Finish it.

Get to the end of the draft no matter what, because you need to see what the whole thing looks like before you can start to revise.

Remember, before you even think about examining what you wrote, put it in a drawer and leave it for a while.

And having said all that…

When you take someone else’s advice, it’s always good to remember William Goldman’s motto: ‘Nobody knows anything.’ He was talking about writing in the movie business, but he could’ve been talking about any form of writing, or indeed life:

Nobody else can tell you how to do your thing – so you should always take their advice with a pinch of salt, use what works for you and throw the rest away!!

Next time I thought I would write 5 tips on re-writing, but perhaps I’d better wait until I’ve finished that stage to do that!

Usborne to publish COGHEART

Usborne to publish COGHEART

I’m delighted to announce that Usborne are going to publish Cogheart, my debut children’s novel, in Spring 2016. The announcement of the deal appeared in The Bookseller last Thursday (June 11, 2015). A massive thanks to my agent Jo Williamson who helped make it happen. I’m really looking forward to working with Rebecca, Becky, and all at Usborne on this and future books…

ballooncolouredUsborne signs Peter Bunzl

Usborne Publishing has acquired a middle-grade book by debut author Peter Bunzl.

Rebecca Hill, Usborne fiction director, acquired the world rights (excluding the US and Canada) in a two-book deal from Jo Williamson of Antony Harwood, to Cogheart, which is about a girl investigating her father’s disappearance.

In the novel, 13-year-old Lily tries to find out what happened to her father, who disappeared after a routine Zeppelin flight. She travels to London with Robert, the local clockmaker’s son, but she is not the only person searching for her father, as there are “men in the shadows” also on his trail.

Usborne beat four other publishers at auction and Hill said she is “thrilled” to have won the deal. “It’s an extraordinary debut: wildly imaginative, with remarkable characterisation and a wonderful adventure story at its core. We are convinced that Peter’s story is going to delight young readers everywhere.”

As well as writing Bunzl is also an animator and he has worked on two two BAFTA winning cartoon series (Yoko! Jakamoko! Toto! and The Secret Show). His film, “Mind Games” was a finalist for Virgin Media Shorts (2008).

Cogheart will be published in spring 2016.

SCBWI Professional Series Talks – Book Packaging

SCBWI Professional Series Talks – Book Packaging

Before attending this talk I’d no idea what book packaging involved, I thought it might mean designing or typesetting books. I soon discovered how wrong I was when David Richardson of SCBWI introduced the two speakers, Benjamin Scott and Michael Ford.

Michael is an editor for Working Partners, a book packager that’s produced hundreds of successful series and sold them to publishers around the world; Benjamin is a children’s author who ghost-writes for various of those series.

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Tales from the Blue Room Book launch

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Thursday the 23rd of October 2014 – We had the book launch for Tales from the Blue Room,  an anthology of new short fiction in which I have two short stories, at Foyles, Southbank, Royal Festival Hall. Thanks to everyone who showed up, it was a fantastic event, and we had lots of great responses to the book, especially after people had had a few glasses of wine! Thanks to Annette and Paul for organising things, and thanks to Foyles for hosting us and being so helpful with everything in the run up, and on the night.

Tales From the Blue Room – An Anthology of New Short Fiction is now available to buy in Foyles Southbank, and Waterloo, and on Amazon Kindle here…

See more pictures of the event below…

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Looking at Print on Demand for Tales from the Blue Room

Looking at Print on Demand for Tales from the Blue Room
Tales From The Blue Room my Cover Design
Tales From The Blue Room – Rough Cover Design

Looking at Print on Demand for Tales from the Blue Room

In the process of putting our book together I have had a look at some of the print on demand websites out there. There’s a lot to consider but I thought I would share some of the options and the prices I discovered…

https://www.createspace.com/ (an Amazon owned company that prints books) you’re looking at a cost of $4.09 for every copy you buy.
Selling the books through them on their sites (Amazon etc) you can set the retail price to whatever you like, and Amazon then take a cut of that.

http://www.lulu.com (another US company) 100 paperbacks cost estimate: £382.50, so cost per unit: £3.83 This doesn’t include delivery. They can sell through Amazon Kobo ibooks etc and I think their commission is 20%

http://www.printondemand-worldwide.com seems more for professional publishers who don’t need help with distribution/online sales. 100 paperbacks cost: £351.27 so cost per unit: £3.51. Delivery estimate: £15.00

http://www.troubador.co.uk/matador.asp – Matador seems like a good option if you want someone to take charge of all the elements. However they do have a selection process and reject some manuscripts…
Pre-press: the work required to turn a 180 page MS Word novel manuscript into print ready files (includes typesetting, design, ISBN, bar code, cover… everything to make the manuscript ready for printing): approx. £680.00

Printing is on top:
Printing 1 copy “on demand”: £3.48
Printing 100 copies: £340.00
Printing 500 copies: £1080.00
Printing 1000 copies: £1540.00

And here are 20 other print on demand services:

20 Top Print On Demand Services

Tales from the Blue Room

Tales from the Blue Room
Tales From The Blue Room my Cover Design
Tales From The Blue Room – Rough Cover Design

I designed this book cover for an upcoming self-published anthology of new short fiction. I have a couple of short stories featuring in the anthology.

I will post a link to the collection when it becomes available. But meanwhile here’s the cover blurb…

A man and woman on a date, behind their masks neither is what they seem.

Sarkovski builds a tower in his garden as a monument to his lost love.

Samir has a crush on his new friend. He joins him on a drunken weekend spree.

Coming out to his lover’s family at Christmas pushes Cosmo over the edge.

A couple’s romantic holiday turns sour when the wife is left to take care of the goat.

Marian loves committees and has a special way of dealing with those who disagree.

An East Midlands family christening, names are called and secrets revealed.

Travelling in time, a man revisits his past and meets his childhood sweetheart.

All these stories & more feature in this eclectic mix of short fiction. Coming soon from 8 writers who meet fortnightly in the Blue Bar at the Royal Festival Hall.

A Roman boy at The British museum.

A Roman boy at The British museum.

A thousand stone heads are stuck in glass cases,

Their blank almond eyes and broken stone faces,

Stare me down as I stand here,

On my plastic plinth,

No bigger than the human hand that made me.

 

A Halo of rusted curls, frame my tiny face,

A beatific smile is etched upon my lips,

Lips that never breathed the air, nor kissed another.

Snake hips that never slunk, 

Iron brown skin that never felt a touch,

A lean and languid body, that never grew old, 

Head thrown back in thoughts that never came.

 

An altar boy to a crumbled god.

A votive offering, 

A pocket trinket,

A smugglers ransom,

An art dealers pride,

A museum piece,

I have passed from hand to hand,

In the blink of the universes’ eye,

For two thousand years

Stood Iron and strong

Through every passing moment

And felt none.